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"Anesthesia" ~ Poem By Taly Kix Trix

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  1. Taly

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    I wrote this earlier today. I had my wisdom teeth taken out... So it was amazing I was very coherent enough - nor in too much pain afterwards to write this.

    Anesthesia

    The eerie darkness,
    Holding be so dear,
    While its blackness,
    Always kept me snug and near,
    Removed from my connection to reality,
    An invisible blanket consumes me,
    Comforting me with its formality,
    If the darkness could let me be,
    Maybe I could awaken from this deep sleep,
    And then the shadow of anesthesia would be set free.

    ~By Taly Kix Trix.
     
    #1 Taly, Jun 19, 2015
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    I like how the title is "Anesthesia", because when I realized you had your wisdom teeth taken out before writing this, it's pretty funny. :lol:

    I like it. I usually don't get poetry; but it is very deep, and I enjoyed it.

    Keep up the good work, Trixie!
     
    #2 The Wallflower, Jun 19, 2015
  3. Taly

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    I actually wrote this after I took my wisdom teeth out.

    Heh... the things I'm mentally capable of...

    Thanks for your praise one again wall-e :wink: <3
     
    #3 Taly, Jun 19, 2015
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    Doh! That's what I meant to type.

    Damn, I'm tired.

    Anyways, no problem Trixie. You are very talented, and I love the way you write. <3
     
    #4 The Wallflower, Jun 19, 2015
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    Beautiful, short, sweet, and dark. I like how there seems to be a sense of despair in this poem, though I suppose you could also say it's hopeful, or at least the person whose point of view is in this poem seems to have either hope or despair... Which, as the author, would you say they have??? Perhaps both, but which on an emotional level do you think is most apparent?
     
    #5 iiimee, Jun 19, 2015
  6. Taly

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    Surgery and going under anesthesia in general is something people typically don't like.

    There's despair in pondering the reality that something could go wrong.

    There's hope in wishing for the reality that everything will be alright. :grin:
     
    #6 Taly, Jun 19, 2015
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    Completely awesome. Great poem.
     
    #7 Posthuman666, Jun 19, 2015
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    Beautifully dark and wonderfully chilling. I love it
     
    #8 00Shockwave00, Jun 20, 2015
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    This is beautiful, thank you for sharing it with us. :slight_smile:
     
    #9 Charliee, Jun 20, 2015
  10. Taly

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    Wow, thanks for the nice comments guys. <3 I appreciate it
     
    #10 Taly, Jun 21, 2015
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    My own experience didn't set me on the mood of writing poems... Lucky you.

    Nice one, I agree with Wallflower, it was funny.

    Get well soon.
     
    #11 Michael, Jun 21, 2015
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    Nice poem! I liked it, it was fluent and your touch with adding color was nice, too! :slight_smile:
     
    #12 Invidia, Jun 21, 2015
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    I wouldn't have written this! This is a creative approach to something that left me woozy and my brothers laughing at the video my mom took. It's ridiculous if you're wondering.
    You really capture the eeriness of being put to sleep and not wanting to. The hoplessnessis strongest to me in the 5th to 8th lines. Really love those.
     
    #13 xylaz, Jun 21, 2015
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